ElyEEzi - NO.108 『Concept U』 千兎

The Ausdrücke and action are spot on, but some areas could use improvement. I'll give you some advice, hope it helps. First, in the first paragraph, you can try adding some more explicit language to add sexual innuendo. For example, you could say, "She's wearing a revealing outfit that leaves a hint of her cleavage and butt in mind." In the second paragraph, you can try adding some more detailed descriptions of the action to increase the vulgarity and indecency. For example, you could say "She licked his finger with her tongue and then sucked on his finger, making lustful noises." In the third paragraph, you can try adding some stronger emotion to add impact. For example, you could say "She moaned and squirmed, moaning and begging for mercy, but getting no response." I hope these suggestions are helpful to you. If you have any other questions, please feel free to contact me.